Written task assesment sample

• Criterion A - Rationale (2/2)

The work word count is between the words limit. It, clearly, show that the work had a thought process;eg. It present an intended audience, source of publication. As well the overall purpose on the intended audience is presented. In relation of the formal aspect a justify paragraph is not presented, not deduction of points though.

• Criterion B - Task and content (5/8)

In relation of the text content itself there are clues of knowledge related with the part 1 of the course, and furthermore of other parts of the course there are mentions of language and mass media, in the Coca Cola and Pepsi campaigns examples. There is an attempt of reaching to one conclusion of how language works, it show some ideas related with the constant change in language. There is an opinion present in both indirect and direct way, this last one is a mistake, because on of the characteristics of the editorial, by excellence, is to not present and "I..." statement, because is the opinion of a newspaper, not of an individual. The last thing to reference is that the text makes reference to another texts and works, that, in it's principle, is not a bad thing,by the contrary is a good option to prove a point and persuade the reader, but the mistake in this case is that it mention another newspaper and news networks. It's very rare, for not saying impossible, that one of the networks mentions another for articles and news that they present to prove a point they are trying to make (it's a business after all).

• Criterion C – Organization (4/5)

In an overall the organization is pretty good, its coherent and make sense. It follows the editorial structure well (except of what is mention on Criterion B). The major mistake is in the starting ideas of paragraphs 5 and 6, they start with a question this brakes, a little bit, the sense of coherence; they are related with the topic, but are planted out of nowhere.

• Criterion D – Language and style (5/5)

It present an appropriate language to the nature of the selected text, as well it does not present a complex language; the most complex terms are explain, and it's in a formal way, this in coherence with the idea of an editorial, the opinion of the newspaper. As well there is presence of sophisticated language , such as “jargon” or “English-biased”, this goes in hand with the intended audience, a highly literate reader.